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| What is that? Certainly no meteorite I've ever seen in my studies before. |
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| It's huge! It must be - |
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| roughly 30 yards in diameter. |
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| Hmmm.... |
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| It's most peculiar. |
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| Maybe if I get a closer look.... |
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| Whoa! |
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| Ah! |
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| By Jove, it is scorching hot down here! |
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| What... |
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| What is that- |
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| Ungodly noise? |
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| It's metallic underneath. |
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| This is certainly no meteorite. |
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| What- |
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| on Earth is this thing? |
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| A machine of some sort? |
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| Good heavens! There must be someone trapped inside! |
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| Half roasted to death! Trying to escape! |
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| I have to help! |
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| It's too hot to touch! |
(I realize that the previous two images need to be flipped. I accidentally copied them directly from my thumbnails disregarding the notes I had made to myself that they needed to be facing the other direction. Oops.)
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| What do I do? |
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| I'll go- |
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| get help! |
War of the Worlds
ReplyDeleteGeneral comments: Keep it loose (I like that), but provide more detail, especially the BGs. Consider what you can do to reinforce the mood. Pacing, as he explores the crater, I imagine he would be glancing around, studying everything. How can you communicate that? Establish spaces much better than you have. Back away and show us where we are and what is here. Work more with camera angles (you’ve done some, but can do much more). Use lighting more! I would also use care with the perfectly straight lines – they stand out. Don’t let the grids overwhelm the drawing. Nice gestural/expressive drawings of the character!
For the opening night scene, I would shade the night sky and draw the stars with a white brush. Try to create a more appealing design with the drawing. Would like some evidence or suggestion of the crashed flying saucer.
I like the attitude in the run – try for a stronger silhouette. Would like a suggestion of the environment. When he almost loses his hat – push the event – get more energy in his posing. His change of direction could be more extreme, too.
When he gets to the rocket ship, I am missing a dramatic shot showing the ship, its scale, his relative position and size. I am having a hard time identifying the ship.
What is he doing with the notebook? Drawing pictures? Taking notes ? Is he a reporter? Clarify to the audience.
The environment is important, draw it. What is he clambering down into?
The affect of the heat on him is kind of neat, but not as clear as it needs to be.
The landslide is unclear. I like his reaction and jump, but don’t know what he is looking at, where it is, and from where the landslide comes.
I like the dramatic upshot on him before he tries to touch the craft, but you cross the line on the close-up/insert on his hand.
His leaving the scene is kind of unclear.
I am going to email you some scribbles I made on my iPad.